Do Now:
· Read the two non-fiction texts on bears and, on the sheets, highlight 3-4 pieces of evidence from each text which you could compare to one another. Think about:
oUse of adjectives
oEmotive language
oThe way tension is created
oLinked words or phrases
oLanguage features (e.g. alliteration)
Task 2:
· Working with a partner, write an answer to the following question in a word document:
Compare the ways in which the language of the two texts impacts on their readers. (16 marks)
· You should aim to make at least 3 comparative points
· When finished, copy and paste your answer as a comment on this post and leave your names
Task 3:
- Write an answer to the following 8 mark question (1):
Homework due Thursday:
· Read all of the other answers to the question. Write a new comment explaining which one you think would receive the highest mark and give at least three reasons for your answer
Compare the ways in which the language of the two texts impacts on their readers (16 marks)
ReplyDeleteIn the first text, ‘The day I survived a very grizzly bear attack’, the writer employs an adjective to terrify the reader.
“The real thing is a 70-stone killing machine which can move with devastating, explosive speed.” The term ‘explosive’ used to describe the momentum of the beast frightens the reader as the real threat of the bear’s power, which is shown through its speed, is exposed.
Similarly, an adjective is hired by the author of the second text, ‘A Walk in the Woods’ to cause an alike impact on the reader.
“Defending oneself against 400 pounds of ravenous fur.’’ The adjective ‘ravenous’ again alarms and scares the reader, as a famished bear is not a particularly pleasant one as this is implied by the defense against the bear required.
In the first source, the writer, Guy Grieve, utilizes emotive language to inspire sympathy in the reader.
“I faced every kind of danger, from starvation to excruciating cold.” Grieve’s words causes the reader to pity him and sympathize with him. The word ‘excruciating’ particularly emphasizes the awful agony he encountered throughout his travels and this allows the reader to express empathy for him.
Contrastingly, in the second source, the author, Bill Bryson, applies emotive language to instigate tension in the reader.
“It went silent, whatever it was, and stared back at me.” His choice of language is emotive due to the stress the words arouse in the reader, as the specific usage of ‘it’ creates a sense of mystery and tension, as the reader is unsure of what ‘it’ actually is at that present time in the piece.
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Although you didn't finish, the two texts were well compared and I think the analysis was good too.
DeleteThe 2 texts are well compared with good analysis meeting most of the AO's
DeleteReally good analysis of boths texts, although you didn't finish I would agree with Daria and say you met most of the Aos and if you would have continued you would have probably got all of them.
DeleteLayla, your range of vocabulary is extremely broad and it makes the piece of writing sound soooo sophisticated. You've excelled in all the AO's, bar the 7th (which is to obviously repeat this 3 times). Otherwise, there is not much else to say... very well done :)
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ReplyDeleteThe adjectives used in text 1 are used to create tension and suspense:
“The real thing is a 70-stone killing machine”
This implies the terror which the man feels when he sees the bear. The image of a “killing machine” keeps the reader on the edge of their seat, as he is worried for the safety of Guy Grieves; the phrase creates a image of a mechanical “70-stone” murderer that is programmed to rip apart Guy Grieves. Naturally the reader is kept in suspense at the fate of Guy Grieves. Meanwhile the choice of adjectives in text 2 portrays a wary approach to the bear:
“-and then a kind of large, vaguely irritable snuffling noise.”
The use of emotive language in text 1 is effective in breaking the tension:
“I felt like the most fortunate man alive”
This implies, to the reader, that the man escaped death. The idea of him being the “most fortunate man” demonstrates the scale of the danger which he just surpassed; the man, having just escaped a bear attack, feels “fortunate” to have gotten away from such a monstrosity with barely a scratch. On the other hand the emotive language in text 2 is effective in increasing the tension:
“I’m in the woods, in the middle of nowhere, in the dark, staring at a bear, with a guy who has nothing to defend himself with but a pair of nail clippers”
This shows the panic and hysteria of the character; the reader is naturally pulled to feel the same panic and as the character. Furthermore the idea of being “being in the middle of nowhere” with just “nail clippers” to defend yourself makes a dramatic scene of a defenceless man amidst huge danger.
Question 4 comparison
ReplyDeleteText 1 uses adjectives to make the text more realistic for the reader and involve them in the text:
“...from starvation to excruciating cold-”. The writer’s use of adjectives gives the reader a feel of the extent of how cold he felt. The word “excruciating” emphasises how cold it was, in a way making the reader somehow feel the cold, therefore making the text feel real to them. However, unlike text 1, text 2 also uses adjectives but to provoke a particular response from the audience:
“...but patently inadequate for defending yourself against 400 pounds of ravenous fur.” The phrase “patently inadequate” is used to give the situation an almost comical edge for the reader as “inadequate” seems quite sarcastic, showing us, the reader, that it isn’t as serious as the first text. Despite both texts using adjectives for a specific purpose, they are rather different ones.
Secondly, text 1 uses alliteration to sense of danger:
“they can approach slowly, sedately, stealthily…”
The writer’s repetitive use of an “s” sound with “slowly, sedately, stealthily” (which is also sibilance) cleverly slows down the pace when reading the text and chiefly giving a feeling of an approaching danger like a hissing snake. Text 2 also uses alliteration:
“-a click of braking branches…”, the rough “br” sound from “braking branches” also gives a sense of danger however instead of sounding like a menace it sounds more like a more intense, direct danger. Although both texts use alliteration, they have to different intended effects.
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This comparison is very good because Loretta refers to specific words and the emphasises and impact it has on the audience.
DeleteCompare the ways in which the language of the two texts impacts on their reader.(16 marks)
ReplyDeleteText 1 uses adjectives to describe the animal. The word used is “killer” this implies that the animal the writer has come in contact with is a dangerous creature with an instinct to kill whereas, text 2 uses the adjective “thing” which implies that the identity of the animal is hidden by the dark creating tension as the reader is not aware of what it is. By using different adjectives the writers impact the readers in diverse ways.
Text 1 uses assonance to show how the animal is moving. The words “slowly, sedately, stealthily” the assonance of ‘s’ also implies that the animal is calm creating tension as you can’t predict what will happen next whereas text 2 uses a simple adjective to show lack of movement from the animal. “kept staring” this shows the anticipation between the writer and the unpredictable animal. By describing the movement of the animal using different techniques the writer creates a different impact.
Ext 1 also uses emotive language to create tension;
“I will never forget that powerful animal towards me”
The use of ‘never’ suggests to the reader that the writer has been so traumatised by this experience he will always remember it . This evokes sympathy in the reader as you wouldn’t want this to happen to you so you would not wish it to anyone else . However text 2 makes the reader sympathetic by the unknown identity of the animal . “How the hell should I know” this shows that the lack of knowledge about the animal is creating tension between the characters and showing they themselves are oblivious . Therefore by the use of emotive language both of the texts create tension and cause the reader to feel sympathetic towards the writer/character.
this one is good because they compared the language but best of all expalined the affect of the language on the aundience.
DeleteIn text 1 the language used impacts the audience by the use of alliteration:
ReplyDelete“They can approach slowly, sedately, stealthily”
The use of assonance makes the text seem possibly frightening as snakes make this type of noise, especially dangerous types such as a rattle snake. Additionally as the text says “stealthily” this means sneakily or craftily; the audience may respond to the text in a cautious manner, as the description of the bear evokes the audience to put on a protective layer in regard to bears. Similarly, in text two alliteration is also used and it provokes an anxious response from the reader and emphasises the point the reader is trying to put across. Notably:
“A click of breaking branches”
Especially, the use of the word “breaking” symbolises damaged or something being destroyed. This can cause the audience to feel a sense of anxiety and possibly frightened as the writers use of words stimulates this emotion and makes the reader vividly visualise this scenery. Overall, the use of alliteration in both texts is successfully used to generate an emotional response from the reader and contributes to the effectiveness the text has on the reader.
In text one the use of adjectives impacts the audience, tremendously. In this case the fact that the bear is described as a “cuddly creature” yet it is extremely “dangerous” affects the audience. It can possibly make the audience feel a sense of sympathy and increase interest in regards to the bear; especially, as the bear is referred to a “cuddly”. Similarly, text two uses adjectives to emphasis points impacting the audience. Notably “my brain was awake and dashing frantically,” the use of personification, in regard to the brain creates an intense image of how the writer’s head feels. Also, as this device is used it can be seen as exciting to the reader as making the brain posses such charisma is unusual therefore contributing to the excitement of the reader. Overall, showing how the use of adjectives and other language techniques and device affect the reader and displaying how the different styles of writing in both texts affect the reader.
Question 4
ReplyDeleteIn text one the writer says “I faced every kind of danger, from starvation to excruciating cold-...” the writer’s use of the adjective “excruciating” sets the scene and emphasises the sense of danger and hardships that the writer is trying to convey. This then makes the reader/audience feel sympathetic towards the writer’s position. Similarly, in the two the writer says “it was perfect sleeping weather”. The adjective “perfect” again sets the scene as the writer’s expectation is that everyone can visualise what perfect is. This then makes us be able to relate to the writer’s current circumstances at the time. In summary, adjectives are used in the same way but they cause slightly different emotions for the reader - appropriate to the scene.
In text one the writer says “cuddly creatures” when describing the teddy bears in relation to grizzly bears. This use of alliteration makes the reader think about a teddy bear that fits the description and envision what one might look like which adds to the imagery created. In text two alliteration is used in the same way. The writer says “breaking branches” and the repetition of the “b” sound evokes the sense of sound and makes the reader imagine the sounds themselves. In conclusion, alliteration is used by both writers in both texts to trigger the senses into bring the piece of writing alive in their imagination.
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Question 4 :
ReplyDeleteText 1, written by Guy Grieve is powerful as it uses powerful emotive language and contains powerful anecdotes. Referring to a bear as a “70-stone killing machine which can move with devastating, explosive speed.” This quote has a massive impact on the reader, as it is so brutal and harsh, and we feel genuinely feel scared for the safety of the person. This is very effective as the amount of tension this quote builds up for the reader, provokes us to read on, and find out the fate of Guy. The language used in text 2, is also effective, and has slight humour added to it, which lightens the tense atmosphere it creates. “Please withdraw at once, you horrid creature.” This quote is so serious yet, the formality of the tone suggest sarcasm, which makes it funny. Considering the two mountain walkers are potentially in danger, this quote makes the reader on edge as to what is to come next as their fate hangs in the balance, but as the character has such a light hearted approach to it all, we are quite reassured, but want to know what happens next.
Both texts have short, precise, paragraphs that are effective. The use of the short paragraphs allows us to notice every detail of both experiences that are being described, making it so much more powerful.